Avoiding Clichés In Writing

I’m preparing to write a new script. It’s called ‘The Ball’s In Your Court’ and it’s about a down and out baseball coach who is given one last chance. He takes on a group from a poor neighbourhood who are being ostracised from their community because of a mixture of issues including race relations, gang violence and petty crime, which is in reality incidental as they are good kids. The star player and the coach don’t get on. The coach doubts the star player’s commitment and the star player thinks the coach is washed up.

As the story progresses the group is brought together by being a team and the coach starts to believe in the star player’s abilities. The star player learns that the coach actually sustained a serious injury which ended his career and finds some old footage of him in action, which makes him see things differently.

They meet their main opposition at a pre-match event and they are better dressed, better equipped and generally seem to have a better chance. On the way back from the event the brother of the star player, who is also on the team, is involved in a fatal car accident. The star player goes off the rails and back to his old ways.

The rest of the team do their best to pull together, but it’s not looking good. Just as the big match is about to start the star player turns up, dressed to play and gives an emotional speech saying that this is what his brother would have wanted. He and the coach exchange knowing looks.

So far so good. However, it’s the next bit I’m a bit concerned about. During the match the star player is injured and it seems that the team have no chance of winning. But he comes back and wills them on from the sidelines which turns the game round and they win by a point with just seconds left on the clock. I’m worried that might be a bit of a cliché.

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